Over the long weekend, I got a bunch of people sending me their webcomics and asking for a review. I’m trying to get better at not just ignoring these, so let’s bang out some reviews!
What’s it about: Wally is a poor farming boy who is given a watch that can bring his imagination to life
What’s good: Interesting concept, brisk pace. The art, while not technically great, nevertheless provides a lot of interesting visuals, especially in the imagination sequences. Quick and easy read.
What’s bad: There’s some wonky posing/proportions. Pace seems a little rushed in places
I don’t like this introduction shot at all. It’s not that there’s anything “wrong” with it, per se, but this is the first appearance of this weird magical character who suddenly appears with a gust of air, and he’s just standing there in a mildly odd pose (what’s up with his legs?). What am I supposed to be feeling, here? There’s not a lot of character to this character, and nothing he does in the rest of the chapter adds much to him besides “vaguely magical old guy in a bow tie”. I can’t even give suggestions for how to get his character across stronger because I don’t know what it is.
Thoughts: A perfectly cromulent kid-friendly comic, assuming it’s not revealed that Wally is crazy or somesuch. I wasn’t really blown away by any of it, but nothing stood at as terrible. If I were giving advice, it would be to spend a bit more time thinking about little ways to let a character’s personality shine through. A lot of the secondary characters start off as types and stay there.
What is it: https://www.reddit.com/r/behindthegifs. In fact, this comic literally gets posted there as well, so good job promoting it.
What’s good: Use of gifs in in the lead-up panels are neat.
What’s bad: May actually be more generic than “Two guys on a coach talking video games”.
Thoughts: I mean, it’s a Reddit behind-the-gif comic. I don’t know what to say about it. As I write this the PUPS comic is top of /r/behindthegifs with net 1275 upvotes, so good for you. Gag-a-day has never been my reviewing strength.
Thoughts: What the fuck is this
The Good: “Rocketmummy” is an awesome URL. Setka is a strong and interesting character, and an unusual one for an MC (beyond the conceits of the strip).
The Bad: Main Character looks like the invisible man in that one porny slipshine comic I keep seeing ads for, which distracts me. Kind of veers between story and gag-a-day, leading to confusion when the first few strips establish Setka, have a set-up conversation, have Setka leave, have Setka arrive at the Lethe, and then suddenly Setka is back in the classroom to hear a joke about Frankenstein family trees.
Thoughts: I like this! It’s very new, but promising. It feels like a version of Dresden Codak from an alternate dimension where Dresden Codak is good. It’s got a lot of charm to it, and I want to see more.
The Good: As far as I can tell, there’s only seven pages so far and the comic has a slow build start, so it’s folly to criticize the story at this point (From what I’ve seen, it actually looks pretty good). I like the concept, though. A comic starring rodents in a realistic setting is uncommon. I’m only aware of one other comic like it
The Bad: It’s Scurry
So you’re kind of inviting a tough comparison. But hey, we’re forged through adversity. And first thing’s first
This isn’t good. I literally can’t read this.
Your art is actually pretty good. They’re realistic, they have clear body language that feels rat-like, I can distinguish characters from each other (which normally isn’t much of a compliment, but it’s worth noting with a cast of realistically drawn rats that I don’t get confused who’s who). But the lettering. You really need to work on that as a top priority, because it’s making your comic look terrible when you have the skill to do better.
Lettering sucks and I hate it and I paid a guy to do it for me as fast as I could, and I promise you you’re better at art art tools than I am. There’s no excuse to be worse at it than I am. It is far and away the biggest issue with your comic.
Nitpick: As mentioned, you draw some good rats
The backgrounds are kind of just gray
I realize that the comparison to Scurry is a little unfair, and I don’t think you have to paint like Mac Smith to make a good webcomic, but just the camera being such that the wall is an at angle, and a mouse coming through the hole makes it feel like an environment, instead of a backdrop. Small things like that.
Thoughts: I think this comic has a lot of potential, though at a mere seven pages it’s hard to judge it (I’ll confess that I might be a bit too hard on you for backgrounds), but that lettering is killing you because it makes your comic look amateurish despite your art skill.
This jumped out at me immediately. I really like, rather than just having “a phone”, he has a phone with a cracked screen, and his latest messages tell us what he’s like and that he has people saved as “Mega Bitch” and “Little Bitch”. I like how he doesn’t spell properly. These are details a lot of other webcomics wouldn’t think to add, and they go a long way. The characters are strong, and that helps make the story interesting during this set-up phase.
The Bad: Ordio Ordio Ordio Ordio Ordio Ordio.
I understand that it’s an important concept, but Jesus, “Ordio” appears like three times a page. I get it. Thank you.
Thoughts: I generally liked this comic, but the Ordio ordio ordio grated on me quite a bit. Probably more than it would on most people, but there we go.